Round 19 – Haiku Bob – in two minds

 

 

rotting leaves

we win

ugly

 

 

 

snow-covered mountains

Frost holding

his own

 

 

 

winter gust

the centre-half forward

immovable

 

 

 

winter departing

the different shape

to our forward line

 

 

 

 

fingering

an old scar

we give up the lead

 

 

 

 

twilight

the defender

caught in two minds

 

 

 

 

sun goes down

we start to lose

our way

 

 

 

 

sun falls

behind the stand

Beams from nowhere

 

 

 

 

final siren

stars scattered

around the moon

 

About rob scott

Rob Scott (aka Haiku Bob) is a peripatetic haiku poet who calls Victoria Park home. He writes haiku in between teaching whisky and drinking English, or something like that.

Comments

  1. Loved the sun and Beams connection in one verse (stanza? what are they called in Haiku, Bob?)
    Seemed a natural not forced connection in the way you used it.
    Do you store them up like Dennis Cometti waiting for the right moment,?
    Hoping there will be an Indian Ocean sunset for the Pies next Haiku. Should be a good game, with the big ground and fine warm weather. Looking forward to both game and haiku.

  2. haiku bob says

    It’s called a haiku sequence PB.
    A linked series of haiku.
    So each of them is a haiku in their own right.

    I’ve occasionally stumbled across ideas that I’ve stored away for future reference, but usually I try to stay ‘in the moment’.

    Cheers,

    HB.

  3. DBalassone says

    These are so good, I too like PB thought you might have a stored up list of ideas (a bit like Larry David’s notebook that he pulls out whenever he needs a new episode of Curb or Seinfeld), particularly those great lines re Frost and Beams.

    Looking forward to a haiku about a well-rested Swan returning to his eponymous river on Sunday night (or will it be an ugly duckling?).

  4. haiku bob says

    Thanks DB.

    The Frost & Beams ones almost write themselves. As you would know, haiku can often involve a play on words – a technique I often use (perhaps overuse) in footy haiku. Surnames like ‘Frost’ and ‘Beams’ are an open invitation to the double entendre, which probably should be avoided at all costs. But with the Frost one, I was aware of the arctic weather in Melbourne this week, and this hopefully ‘lightened’ the blow of the sledge-hammer double meaning.

    Just one of the many things to try to keep in balance in writing haiku.

    Cheers,
    HB.

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