rotting leaves
we win
ugly
snow-covered mountains
Frost holding
his own
winter gust
the centre-half forward
immovable
winter departing
the different shape
to our forward line
fingering
an old scar
we give up the lead
twilight
the defender
caught in two minds
sun goes down
we start to lose
our way
sun falls
behind the stand
Beams from nowhere
final siren
stars scattered
around the moon
About rob scott
Rob Scott (aka Haiku Bob) is a peripatetic haiku poet who calls Victoria Park home. He writes haiku in between teaching whisky and drinking English, or something like that.
Loved the sun and Beams connection in one verse (stanza? what are they called in Haiku, Bob?)
Seemed a natural not forced connection in the way you used it.
Do you store them up like Dennis Cometti waiting for the right moment,?
Hoping there will be an Indian Ocean sunset for the Pies next Haiku. Should be a good game, with the big ground and fine warm weather. Looking forward to both game and haiku.
It’s called a haiku sequence PB.
A linked series of haiku.
So each of them is a haiku in their own right.
I’ve occasionally stumbled across ideas that I’ve stored away for future reference, but usually I try to stay ‘in the moment’.
Cheers,
HB.
These are so good, I too like PB thought you might have a stored up list of ideas (a bit like Larry David’s notebook that he pulls out whenever he needs a new episode of Curb or Seinfeld), particularly those great lines re Frost and Beams.
Looking forward to a haiku about a well-rested Swan returning to his eponymous river on Sunday night (or will it be an ugly duckling?).
Thanks DB.
The Frost & Beams ones almost write themselves. As you would know, haiku can often involve a play on words – a technique I often use (perhaps overuse) in footy haiku. Surnames like ‘Frost’ and ‘Beams’ are an open invitation to the double entendre, which probably should be avoided at all costs. But with the Frost one, I was aware of the arctic weather in Melbourne this week, and this hopefully ‘lightened’ the blow of the sledge-hammer double meaning.
Just one of the many things to try to keep in balance in writing haiku.
Cheers,
HB.