scattered showers
Richmond players
in disarray
dodging the drips
from the grandstand roof
Swan finds a way
broken clouds
all the spaces filled
with magpies
wet track
Pendlebury bobs up
among the flotsam
autumn rain
a steady trickle
of goals
shrouded moon
Richmond gives up
the ghost
night rain
soaking up
the victory
About rob scott
Rob Scott (aka Haiku Bob) is a peripatetic haiku poet who calls Victoria Park home. He writes haiku in between teaching whisky and drinking English, or something like that.
I like your poems but they are not really haiku which have 5 syllables 7 syllables and 5 syllables.
You have caught the nature bit well.
Beautiful work Haiku Bob – captured the mood of the night perfectly (as per usual). I especially like the appearance of the word ‘flotsam’, a word which I haven’t heard since listening to the Waterboys classic “She Tried to Hold Me”.
Should I address you as Haiku Bob or Blank (verse) Bob? I feel woefully equipped to adjudicate in the Poetry Wars.
Dear Rob – poignant and wistful as always. I wonder why you constantly put Swan in your poems. Hoping to engender a bit of positive, trickle-down haiku effect on the once great player?
“Finds a way”??? Looks to me like he mostly finds himself with nothing better to do, these days.
Country Cat – In English language haiku (& in many circles in Japan) syllable counting stopped long ago. The dictionary definition hasn’t caught up yet. There is much debate about what constitutes a haiku and I have my own views. For illustrative purposes only, the current definition of the Haiku Society of America reads: A haiku is a short poem that uses imagistic language to convey the essence of an experience of nature or the season intuitively linked to the human condition.
Peter_B – don’t worry about Swanny.
HB.
A tough crowd this week, HB.
As per DB’s comment and my EBW post, just love to see the word “flotsam” associated with a game of footy. But, disappointed you didn’t sneak “jetsam” into it with a line about Vickery and his performance!
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