A Poem to Ahmed Saad

I like writing articles, but do not think I am good at creating poems. However the news of Ahmed Saad to be redrafted made me to try writing a poem no matter if he would be back to the mighty Saints or not.

To be honest, I may break the rule of a poem and there may be no rhythm, but hope Saad listens to my thoughts on him.

 

A-ah-med Saad. Welcome back to the red, white and black army

Sa-ah-d that you were banned from the footy for 18 months

Bu-ah-t now you are back to the mighty Saints

Gl-ah-d to see you will score goals for beloved our club

A-ah-med, you are a good player for the mighty Saints

A-ah-nd, you are an ambassador of multicultural at the Saints

Gl-ah-d to see you create uniqueness for red, white and black

 

Ahmed’s coming back to the Saints makes me smile for the day. I think it is my debut on a poem, no matter if it is in English or Japanese. Feedback and advice on creating a poem are all welcome and appreciated.

Have a good day to you all.

About Yoshihiro Imagawa

Love, passion and pride are seen on the footy that is the biggest part of my life. 1. St Kilda Club member: I am a passionate and crazy Sainter. Just hope we will win the second flag soon, especially after Dogs and Tigers having ended long premiership draughts. 2. The Osaka Dingoes Player and Public Relations Officer: Player number 44 that I chose to honour Stephen Milne with my wish being like a small forward like him. Lenny Hayes' hardworking attitudes are adopted on my trainings and practices. Nick Riewoldt's great plays are in my player audiobook too. 3. Writing: Here on the Almanac and also on the World Footy News. My skills utilise on great footy websites.

Comments

  1. Neil Anderson says

    Well done Yoshi.
    I have always steered away from trying to write poetry. At school it was never encouraged and most of my classmates just saw it as a chore…slightly worse than tackling Shakespeare. I did at least appreciate Shakespeare better as a mature-age student when fellow students in the class wanted to learn and didn’t groan when one of the plays was set for reading.
    You have done remarkably well with your poem. To be able to write that so quickly, in your second language is quite extraordinary. Don’t worry about rhyme or rhythm too much. The Beat poets of the 1950’s would be proud of you and so would modern -day rappers.
    I will refer your poem to my wife who is about to do a PHD on a famous Australian poet, for her thoughts.

  2. G’day Neil,

    Thanks for your compliment on the poem and sharing your thoughts on literatures.

    As I didn’t mark good scores on Japanese at school, I didn’t expect myself to write a Japanese poem. I was able to do in English thanks to my enthusiasm in studying English all the time (I vowed to study English hard and to never lose English skills when I got the second chance to study English 15 years ago as an adult).

    Whilst undertaking an online course in English Language and Literature, writing poem was one of units but I never thought I would involve in writing a poem. I’m glad that I remember what I studied!

    I look forward to hearing from your wife about the poem. Thanks for being refer my poem to her :-)

    All the best

    Yoshi

  3. Cat from the Country says

    My wife, clearly a cat fan, showed me your poem for comment.
    My poems are often about significant events in my life or thoughts I need to deal with, and your poem, Yoshi, certainly does this with style.
    I loved your playing with the sound of the syllables. Several of my poems play with the words, or make up new ones.
    I have written none about football ( I barrack for the Doggies, but only when they win!!) But I will see how the spirit moves me. Of course it would need to be a Haiku to fit with my new muse!
    Here is one I prepared earlier.

    THE EXPEDITION
    Optimistic start
    Creek, line, bait, beer…
    time…
    rain…
    home…
    Wet-arsed and fishless.

    It could well apply to the Doggies!!

    Terry Allan

  4. G’day Terry,

    Thanks for your comment on my poem. I think everyone has different interests, senses and styles. As I have written in another article talking about sport and art, some people like art while others like sports. Even some people like playing sports and others like watching. Then some people just watch sport while others also like writing about sport as well as watching. I hope you enjoy watching your beloved Bulldogs.

    To be honest, I hadn’t known about haiku in English until a New Zealand radio station called ZM was holding a Haiku competition whose prizes were ski trips to Japan. In Japanese Haiku, syllables of five-seven-five are required with a word describing a season. Then it is not my stuff because of bad sense in Japanese art (also bad scores of Japanese at school traumatise me, still). But I have enthusiasm in the English language.

    Your poem expressing your life is good. I wish good luck with the Doggies.

    Can you please hi and thank you to your wife who showed you my poem?

    All the best,

    Yoshi

  5. Cat from the Country says

    Hi Yoshi. In 1988 we had a young Japanese man stay with us on our farm at Carisbrook, Victoria Australia. Could you be that Yoshi?
    Cheers Thea

  6. Hi Thea,

    I’m afraid to say that I am not that person. My first overseas trip was in January 2001 on the Gold Coast.

    Cheers,

    Yoshi

  7. this is beautifu Yoshil. I would love to see this recorded and played on youtube. We need more people like you. Thankyou

  8. Ahmed saad says

    Hello Yoshil,

    Just wanted to stop by and say thank you for the poem! It’s the best one I’ve read and real enjoyed it.

    I’m also very happy to be back at the saints and had a huge smile on my face when I found out!

    I can’t wait to get back to the club and train and play with the boys again!

    Thank you again for your kind words

    Love saady
    Go saints !!!

  9. G’day Dis,

    Thanks for your positive feedback with warm compliments. I will try to record my speaking the poem when possible and not to be embarrassed.

    All the best.

    Yoshi

  10. G’day Saady,

    Thank you so much for your compliment on my poem and warm words. I’m really happy to hear that you enjoyed reading it!!

    I understand your excitement coming back to the Saints and training and playing with boys. I’m truly proud of supporting the wonderful footy club.

    My wish to watch a game at a stadium is getting bigger and bigger now. I want to see your great kicking and scoring goals.

    Good luck with everything and all the best. And go the mighty Saints!!!

    Love
    Yoshi

  11. Peter the Mudie says

    Great poem from a Saints supporter.
    For everyone else, an Ahmed Saad poem would look like:

    Saad takes the mark about 30 out,
    45 degrees is the angle,
    he marks the spot,
    and paces back,
    then slowly…
    slowly…
    slowly…
    slowly…
    slowly…
    slowly…
    slowly…
    slowly…
    slowly…
    [commercial break – something about beer, then auto insurance, a rerun promo about a Channel 7 family show – etc]
    returning to Saad….
    as…
    he moves forward…
    slowly…
    slowly…
    slowly…
    slowly…
    slowly…
    slowly…
    slowly…
    slowly…
    slowly…
    slowly…
    before he kicks
    at the sticks
    and wishes he was a bit more careful.

    Great drama – where would a football broadcast be without Saad.

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