A Haiku in 18 parts

Karma quells
The early crow

 

An army shares
Buckley’s hope

 

Great expectations
Playing at the Malthouse

 

Spectre of Dyer
Seasons haunt

 

A once mighty power
Soldiering on

 

Dank corridors
No exit in sight

 

Lyon on the line
Slams the phone

 

Inner Demons
Now on the outer

 

Autumn leaves
Dog day afternoons

 

Suck on that
Paddle pop lion

 

Coasting by
A vacant high-rise

 

Money pours
Down a giant well

 

Crowded market
Roo for sale

 

Bounced and toe poked
Old Saints be damned

 

Hawks fly by
Windows open and close

 

Eagle one
Orbits the ‘G

 

Feline groovy
A belly full of cream

 

Swanning about
The spoils of victory

 

@JeffDowsing

With apologies and deference to Rob Scott on my Haiku debut – may the Review Panel be lenient for my crimes against Haiku law!

About Jeff Dowsing

Washed up former Inside Sport and Sunday Age Sport freelancer. Now just giving my stuff away to good homes. Not to worry, still have my health and day job. Published & unpublished works fester on my blog Write Line Fever.

Comments

  1. Stephen Cooke says:

    Very clever, Jeff. Well done.

  2. haikubob says:

    spookily similar to Harold Stewart’s translations of Japanese haiku in the 50’s, the first such attempt in Australia, which were arranged into two-line couplets (only his rhymed!). the ‘rules of haiku’ are such at the moment that if you want to call something a haiku, then it’s a haiku.

    welcome to the fold JD.

  3. Thanks Bob, always enjoy your work.

    Beyond the double meanings and attempt at an interactive arrangement, rhyming was a bridge too far for this novice!

  4. I really enjoyed that Jeff.

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